Writing: Remembering Our Summer Holiday In 7 Sentences | By Jack

Today for writing, we needed to reflect a moment in our summer holidays. We were then given a template, with different human senses, and had to morph the senses into sentences about the event we chose to reflect. Once completed, we needed to show our work to a teacher, and illustrate the situation. The moment that I chose to reflect was when I went to a music store to get an amp with my guitar. I really liked this writing activity, and it really did get my imagination going wild once we had started illustrating.

Remembering our summer holiday

L.I. - Writing to recount

Writing using language features to engage readers

Complete these sentences about an event over the summer holiday. Don’t tell us what the event was just give us
enough information that we can know for ourselves.

I heard the ring as I walked through the door “RING”

I heard the instruments strumming, followed by a charming sound of an angel singing.

I saw many different shaped objects surrounding the room, like bees defending their hive.

I felt the vibrations from the differently pitched tones.

I felt each string get thinner and thinner the further I ran my fingers down the instrument, like a blunt knife getting
sharper and sharper.

I wondered if one day I could perform with my new hobby, and make a living out of it in the future.

Although I wondered how long this hobby would continue, I just continued to experiment with what I had.

Illustration:

Can You Guess What I Did Over The Summer Holidays by Ofa

L.I. - Writing to recount

Writing using language features to engage readers

Complete these sentences about an event over the summer holiday.
Don’t tell us what the event was just give us enough information that we can know for ourselves.

I wondered if the bouncy castle is on today, although I do not want to get caught doing mischievous
things on it.

I saw one lifeguards looking at me like a spying camera.

I heard multitudes of splashes around the centre.

I heard girls screeching like a bunch of falcons and boys bombing like whales.

I felt the coldness of the water splash to my back.

I felt the water slithering around my body.

I wondered if the girl’s screeching would ever end.

Can You Guess What I Did Over The Summer Holidays? by Fraidoon

L.I. - Writing to recount

Writing using language features to engage readers

During the Summer Holidays I have done a lot of things like go to Australia. I enjoyed every part of my holiday, especially my uncles wedding. In my recount I have described one event that happened over the long break. Can you guess what I did? I have sentences describing what I did. Can you guess what I did by using the clues provided for you. 

I heard the water crashing.

I heard the loud music piercing through my ears.

I saw the bright colours in the sky, but I was still not impressed

I felt the sand sliding through my palm.

I felt like I was waiting for years, until it was time.

I wondered when the countdown is going to start.

I wondered If there was going to be a big feast after this.

Photo by Steve Austin/ (CC BY-ND 2.0)

Remembering Our Summer Holiday by Jay-Don

I heard people laughing and screaming. I saw wet people everywhere. I heard the guy next to me gasp as the cold water hugged his dry body. I felt my body start to shiver, that water really was cold. I wondered if how much time we had before closing? I wondered when we were coming back?

 Photo by: Zotdragon CC BY-SA 3.0 

Today we used different language features to help us describe an event from our summer holidays. I have used my words to show rather than tell you what was happening. Can you work out where I was and what I was doing?

Flying Kiwi... by Savelina

On the 23nd of March I was at camp. On that day we got to pick our most enjoyable activity that we had done. I got so excited my heart started pounding and pounding. It was beating so fast I felt like I'd been chased by thousands of dogs! The activities I got to pick from were Archery, High ropes, Orienteering and the flying kiwi. When Mrs Anderson told us about the flying kiwi I thought to myself 'What is the flying kiwi?' Then she told us what this was. I really wanted to do that, so I did!

When the instructors were getting me into the harness I checked if I felt really scared. As soon as the instructors clipped my harness to the rope I knew there was no going back. When the others in my group were pulling me up I regretted my choice on picking this activity. As I reached to the top my eyes were closed. I couldn't open them. I felt like my eyes were stitched to each other! When I finally opened them I could see a magnificent sight. I could see the beautiful trees and bushes. I could also hear the waterfall but as soon as I looked down my heart started racing again. I felt like I was going to fall.

Luckily as the others were lowering me down my heart started to beat slowly and slowly. When my feet touched the ground I felt like I wanted to jump up and down with happiness, but I played it cool even though my friends knew I was almost going to cry at the start.

Today I got to write a recount about something amazing that has happen.This was fun for me because I got to relive my moments from camp. This is a 5 min snapshot of one of my favourite moments at camp.

5 minutes of camp... by Fatongia

I didn't  think I would ever do the high ropes challenge because  I’m scared of heights.

The harness had to be tight so JR checked it for me that made me happy because I didn’t know how to do it. I felt nervous each step I took up the ladder my legs felt wobbly and my heart was racing when I stood on the log and looked down the people looked like ants, standing on the tall wooden  log I felt  like a giant. I heard my group saying  GO FATONGIA ! Dance but I was too shy to dance. I like seeing all the PBS cheating and laughing.

Finally it was time to sit on my harness so JR could get me back on the ground. I felt so happy when my feet were back on the grass.

Today I have to do five minutes writing about camp. I wrote about the high ropes at camp.

Can't believe they made us do this! By Mishaan and Javeylor

I felt very nervous in the dark. My heart was racing, we set off behind each other in a line.We walked very slowly step by step, with other shoulder in front of us for us to see.

We were greeted by the glow worm community. As each  step we took we got further along the pathway as we all grabbed on each other and came closer. I could feel mud going throw my shoes. Each time the light went out the chatter of insects got louder and the screams of classmates came closer.

As we tiptoed across the small  bridge Mrs A and Mrs C was taking a photo of a huge spider. Mrs C shone the light at the spider and Mrs A screamed when the spider came back and stared at us. We were so excited to see the lights back at camp until a cricket started heading towards us on the deck.        

Last week the year 7's and 8's went on camp to Kokako Lodge. This recount is about our night walk. The night walk was really scary when everyone turned their torches off and all we could see was the darkness coming for us.

Lyndon's big wedgie... by Lyndon

The harness got tighter by the second. It felt like the straps were trying to stop the blood flowing in my legs. The next thing I heard was the harness belt clipping on. My heart raced a little bit faster. I knew my adventure was about to begin.

I felt myself heading towards the sky, the wind passing over my skin while my feet waved goodbye to the earth below. I heard kids screaming and cheering while I hoped the giant wedgie the harness was giving me wouldn’t get any worse. It was too late, I was already at the top. I opened my eyes, everything looked ant size!

I began my journey back down. The wedgie loosening as my legs spread apart to give the ground a big old hug. As I unclipped the harness I could feel the blood once again rushing through my legs.

This is my camp recount story it is about well I cant tell you but read the story of what I was talking about (A) high ropes, (B) flying kiwi or (C) archery? See if you got it right by reading all the way to the bottom. I'm sure I felt and heard every thing that it says in the story.

The mysterious walkway... by Jorja

I started feeling nervous. All I could see was the light from torches going on and off as we made our way along the gravel pathway that took us into the darkness.

As we crossed the bridge all I could hear was the sound of a waterfall rushing to the pool below. Everything around me smelt damp. My torch light showed the stairs in front of me. I grabbed the handrail and gripped it tight as other people's voices got louder and louder. Everyone sounded scared!

I started to see a light. As I walked closer I saw that the light was from our camp. The night walk was fun but I was happy to be back in the light until I saw the size of the cricket on the deck! I got a big fright when it flew onto my shirt. I quickly flicked it off.

Today we had to write a recount about an activity that we did a camp. I chose to write about the night walk. I have explained what I have heard, what I have seen, and what I could feel. For my plan I used the y chart and the TREE template.

The bowman... by Jericho

As I picked up my arrow and bow I placed my arrow on the holder and the end under the knot. I remembered the two F’s. I put one of my feet diagonal and one straight.

When I tugged my arrow against my face my index finger went above the knot and my middle finger and ring finger went under.

I let go while my eyes were closed. When I opened them I saw the arrow was not going as quick as I had thought it would and it was going crooked. I had really hoped the arrow was going to get the bulls eye.

The arrow was not supposedly going to hit the target so I just put my bow down in disappointment and then I heard a pop. I turned around and was surprised the balloon had popped. I thought it was skill but Zane thought it was luck.

Today I had to write about camp. I wrote about archery because it was one of my favourite things at camp.

Archery fun... by Hajera

As my cheeks got red like a cherry I was about to explode with excitement. I couldn’t believe I was about to do archery. As each arrow flew the kids were got louder and louder.

Now it was my turn. I picked up the bow and I got the arrow and put it in place. I felt nervous. It was time to let it go. As I let my hands were shaking as it released. A big smile came on my face because I got it on the board!

On my second try I could feel the pressure around me. I then let go of the string. Sadly my arrow landed on the grass. On my last arrow I pulled the string towards me. I was scared I wouldn’t get it but my face had a bigger smile than before. I safely landed it near the board. I was quite proud of myself.

As I finished off this activity I felt like doing it again. Pulling my sleeve up I saw a mark, was it a bruise?

This is my recount of the fun time I had at archery.

The green arrow... by Freeman

As I picked up the arrow with the bow I gently placed the arrow under the knot. I remembered the 2 F’s which were fingers and face I pulled my right hand towards my face.

When I pulled my right hand against my face I placed my index finger on top of the knot and my middle finger  under.  My right hand quivered as it rested against my face.

  Next I was ready to fulfil the last 'F' which was fire. I slowly released my finger and the arrow flew into the air and directly nipped the balloon.

Suddenly I heard the balloon pop and in shock my heart was pounding. I didn't know the arrow would hit it. I thought it was my skills, but Mataio thought it was luck.

This is my recount of my 5 favourite minutes of camp.

Towering stand... by Fraidoon

My heart was racing nearly as quick as light. I checked my harness for the one hundredth time before I decided it was safe for me to go up. Each step I took my heart beat faster and faster. Finally I reached the top. I wanted to see how high I was, then that’s when it hit me. My heart was banging and I stood there frozen like a mannequin.

I could not do anything, then I heard my friends cheering me on. After that I said to myself “I can do this!' Each step I took it got more intense than before I knew it I reached the other side. I was so happy that I made it! The instructor told me I had to walk backwards to the middle. I took one step after another and I got a bit scared but after a couple of steps of fear I got there.

When I reached the point of no return I spread my wings and flew to the ground. I was so happy that I could hug someone.

This is a recount about my favourite moment at camp.

Scary flying kiwi... by Fifita

As I sprinted up and down the slippery, rocky hill my heart beat faster than a cheetah. Aaaah! It’s my turn. I ran to the instructor, put on my harness and tightened it up. I checked my harness if it was stable more than 100 times.

"Kiwi are you ready?"

"YES I AM!"

I shut my eyes and prayed, that’s how frightened I was!

I was dragged up into the air like a plane taking off. I screamed at the top of my lungs. WOW! I was flying just like a bird. I did some bird positions. As Ms Kirkpatrick and Mrs Anderson came, they asked me to sing Rattlin Bog while I was up in the air. I started singing. I had two goes because they said I didn’t look that happy the first time. But on my second go I became more happy.

At the end of the day I was exhausted. I really had fun with the flying kiwi. I wanted to go for a sleep but we needed to do more things. Camp was really enjoyable. I honestly want to go back.

Last week the year 7's and 8's went on camp to Kokako Lodge. This recount is about the flying kiwi. The flying kiwi was really scary that is why my title is the scary flying kiwi. I hope you enjoyed reading my recount. This was a 5 minute recount about my favourite thing that I did.

The hardest steps of my life... by Eric

When it was my turn to go up on the beam I felt nervous. I wanted to go up and come down right away. Step by step up the ladder and up the rungs.

I went to the beam, before I knew it both of my feet were on the beam. I was wrapping my hands around the pole. I asked the instructor "Can I get off now?" but she told me I had to walk a bit. I balanced my way through a quarter of the walk. I was so scared that my legs were quivering. When I was told to step off the beam, I struggled to do it.

When I finally got off, I felt a sigh of relief that I was on my way down. I felt really proud of myself because I had achieved something I though I never would.

This is my recount on one of the events that happen at camp. We had to do five minutes of camp, I picked the High ropes, I wrote what I was feeling and what I was doing.

The balloon popped! By Dallas and Joshua W

We stood up and excitedly walked over to bows that were lying on the cobblestones silently waiting for us. We all picked the bows up at the same time. It was like we were in a race to see who would fire first.  

With the arrows notched onto the bowstring we placed our fingers around the knot. One finger above the knot and two fingers below. Like everyone else we lifted our bows and pulled the string towards our faces. You could hear the ting on the string as the arrow launched itself towards the target.

“Pop!” We couldn't believe our eyes. Both balloons popped at the same time we felt so proud when everybody clapped and cheered.    

Both of us had smiles on our faces as we picked up our arrows. Lucky only we know not all our arrows hit the target.

Today me and Josh wrote a recount about when the balloon popped. It's about how me and Josh stood up and walked over to bows that were lying down on the ground then put one finger above the knot and two fingers below. Like everyone else we lifted the bow only me and Josh got the balloon on the taggert at the same time!

Walking with fear... by Aminiasi

I checked my harness for the 17th time. I was ready. I started to get higher and higher. My heart was pounding like a loud drum. As I was reaching the top, my wobbly legs started to slip. I didn’t give up so I held on tight and continued to climb. When our instructor let me back down I was relieved.

We then had to climb again but it wasn’t the same one. It was much higher! I grabbed onto the ladder and started to climb. After carefully climbing I reached the beam. I walked really steadily to the other side. Rain drops started to fall on me. Each drop shook me a little bit. I regretted climbing on it then. I paused at the end of the beam and took a breath. My group then started to cheer for me. That motivated me to keep on going.

I hobbled backwards to the middle of the beam and was then told to do push ups. I felt really nervous. After I did my push ups I was let down. Never in my life was I so happy to be on the ground.

Birds eye view... by Affonso

This is my camp recount story it is about well I cant tell you but read the story of what I was talking about (A) high ropes, (B) flying kiwi or (C) archery? See if you got it right by reading all the way to the bottom. I'm sure I felt and heard every thing that it says in the story.

No one knew... by Zane

I put my harness on and I got it done up fast so I was ready to climb. My heart was racing as I stepped onto the ladder.

I went first so no one would know I was scared of heights. I started climbing and climbed all the way up the ladder. When I got to the top and I slowly walked across the log trying to keep my balance but I wasn't balanced fell. Luckily I was fine. I walked across and looked down. It was double the size of when I was on the ground! I was frightened!

I could see the falls, it was an amazing view well even if it had mud in it. I got on my knees and started doing push ups. They were hard because I had no room to put my hands anywhere. I did 2 but the person who did the best did 20.

Then it  was time to come down. It was so dangerous because I almost hit my head on the log.

When I got back down to the ground I could feel the adrenaline going through my body. I felt really happy but I inside I was freaking out!


This is my recount of my best 5 minutes of camp. We had to use our words to paint a picture in the mind of the reader to recount our experiences.

Juanita's Recount

On Wednesday Graham Dodd, an artist came to PBS. We meet him in the hall. We were really lucky to have an art session with  him.  He gave us some tasks and showed all of us new skills. Shading dark to light to make it stand out more. I learnt that shading make the picture more 3D and less 2D. Hills are actually light blue to show distance but appear green when you walk closer and closer. I think that our pictures went well and they look really nice. Our painting shows the maori land and a multi cultural side( town). It also was fun because it took the whole block then we went straight to lunch.